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›How
does the writer use words to make the reader care about the children? Choose
two words and explain their effect on the reader.
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Mr Brown
By saying "across the towering nightmare, tiny figures..." it shows how scary life would be working here and how dangerous it can be. Also "there is a danger of being crushed or injured- especially for the children" makes the reader feel guilty because they don't have that risk, so they want to help.
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The writer gives the child's name and shows a picture of the child to form a connection between the audience and the child so the audience know its not just any child, its Marie. The writer also exaggerates and uses similes and metaphors to form a picture in your minds of what it must be like. An example of this in the text is,
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Rachel Horne
by saying "stinking swamps" because it is an alliteration it sticks in the readers mind and the thought of living near stinking swamps is quite shocking and would make people want to donate lots of money to get Marie a new home.
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The writer exaggerates a bit on how desperate the child is, but this is how she\he expresses what the situation is. For example, when he\she says 'home is now a shack of poles and metal sheets' he\she may be exaggerating but it does get the point across about how serious, dangerous and scary life is over where Marie lives.
ReplyDeleteIn that quote I think that 'shack' is a good way of getting the point across because when we think of a shack be think of a wreck of a place filled with grub. We think of poverty and this is what life is like some parts of the world. This is what the writer wants to get across.
Another great word in this leaflet is 'swamp'. Here it is mentioned as 'stinking' so I think that the readers associate this with bogs, mud and a big gross mess. Nobody wants to be anywhere near a swamp let alone think about even living right next to\on one! This is a word which will definitely make people pick up the phone and donate.
Sarah Buckle 7B\7X1
The writer gives the child's name (Marie) which has a greater effect on the readers than saying the children as with giving an example it makes it seem more likely to be true. Also by saying "she longs to go to school" makes us feel guilty as because we go to school. The writer also shows pictures which makes people believe the charity more.
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The writer says 'she's learned to live with cut feet from brocken glass and rusting metal.' This makes you feel sorry for Marie because the writer has said how horrible it is for her.The writer also says that her home is a shack of poles and metal sheets. This is also making you care about Marie because she has no proper shelter. This makes you want to donate to the charity because you want marie to have a better life.
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The writer uses the word "dangerous" to make the reader care about the children. This is effective because it tells you the children are in danger and that awakens the protective instinct adults have for children. Another example of this is "tiny". This is effective because it makes you think of them as vulnerable and that they must feel so insignificant you want to show them you care by giving money.
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The writer’s main aim in this article is to get the reader to donate. One way he does this is by describing their rotten surroundings in detail. An example of this is," rubbish is piled into mountains that smoke and burn and turn into stinking swamps whenever it rains". The writer exaggerates on how unpleasant the area is especially by using the quote, “rubbish is piled into mountains”, when actually in reality there would no specific mountains of rubbish; it is exaggerated. The quote frames a picture in the readers mind which will cause the reader to feel guilty that they have a much better quality lifestyle and feel lured into to helping those in need.
ReplyDeleteTahirah Hayat 7B/7X1
The writer uses hyperbole(exaggeration) to make us feel sorry for her. an example of this is "the city's rubbish is piled into mountains..." the city's rubbish cannot that as a mountain is 1,000 feet high. the writer also uses metaphors which help exaggerate the point. when the writer uses phrases like"Marie longs to go to school" which makes us feel sorry for her as we go to school and she doesn't this may also make people donate as we could go home and tell our parents this may make them want to donate- it at least spreads word about Habitat for humanity so more people are aware of Marie's situation.
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The purpose of this article is for the reader to donate money for poor Marie. The first quote I have picked out is 'learned to live with cuts in her feet from broken glass and rusting metal'.This comes across to the reader as dangerous, life threatening and upsetting. This terrible comment urges the reader as much money as he/she can to help Marie. Another quote I have picked out is 'home is made from a shack of poles and metal sheets'. This is worrying for the reader because the house is not weatherproof or stable and could collapse at anytime so it is a very dangerous environment for Marie to live in.
ReplyDeleteI think it is a very good idea for the writer to add photos of the state that Marie is in and you could not actually picture it properly in your mind but when looking at real pictures it makes you see how bad it is and what life is like for the little girl.
Sofia Pana
I think that the name Marie changes the way the reader feels about the whole article. it has made the text more personal and you get a feeling of security that your money will go to a good cause. if the writer referred to children rather than an individual you might think that the people campaigning do not know anything about who or why they are helping.
ReplyDeleteAlso I think the word everyone creates the effect that you are helping not only a girl like Marie, but also the whole community, as well. It makes people think that their money will go to a good cause and have a massive benefit to all. It makes people connect to the text and cause.
Megan Shakespeare.
In the artical the writer uses many techniques one which is Hyperbole(Exaggeration.)
ReplyDeleteOne example is 'The citys rubbish is piled into mountains that smoke and burn,' this is using hyperbole because the rubbish can not actually be as big as a mountain which means they are using hyperbole.By using this technique it makes you think about little Marie climbing a mountain with dangerous gasses coming off it creates an image.Also it says that smoke comes off the 'Mountains' of rubbish, this is implying that bad fumes are being carried through the air which could make the people ill. Which makes you feel sorry for the people and make you want to give them a better life by donating money.
Lucinda Plummer 7x1(7B).
The writer uses words like: "Across the towering nightmare" to create an effect on the reader which then follows onto the reader's particular feelings: eagerness to help, empathy, sympathy and generosity. The reader - by using words/phrases like towering nightmare makes the reader feel guilty psychologically because the reader thinks of the connotations of towering nightmare and immediately the connotations are horrible, horrific, disturbing etc Therefore, the reader then feels an intense and immense negative feeling. Finally, this then leads onto the person donating money due to the persuasion of the writer.
ReplyDeleteFatimah Hamza 7A/7X1
In the article, the phrase "The cities rubbish is pilled into mountains" gives the reader an exaggerated picture on what the city looks like. When I think mountains I think of a peak that is several kilometres high, however rubbish cannot be that that tall otherwise it will fall back down, so the writer uses hyperbole so that the reader can connect to the it. I think this because if you just say "lots" or "loads," the reader is not as sympathetic towards Marie as they could be, because the reader does not now roughly how tall the pills of rubbish actually is, but if you compare it with something, the reader can estimate how big it is.
ReplyDeleteWhen the writer uses a pacific name, in this case it is "Marie," the writer can talk about her history. this is a good technique to make the reader emotional and feel sympathetic towards the person. Also, when the writer talks about Marie's daily routine, the reader feels guilty, because the reader does not have such a hard and dangerous life. Making the reader feel guilty, could encourage them to donate.
Bismah
The writer says the child's name Marie which has a bigger impact on the audience because when they naturally say the child you might think that they are making it up but when they give the childe a name such as Marie you start to think that there not making it up that they are actually talking about a real girl who's living in a bad condition. It helps a lot to believe the girl is real as well because of the pictures
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Giving the child a name (Marie), along with the pictures helps us to imagine even more the poor conditions these people are living in: "the cities rubbish is piled into mountains" is hyperbole and is exaggerating the point so melt you even more. Also : "cut feet from broken glass" makes you feel reallysympathtic a sorry for, so you will want to donate to help them.
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To make the reader donate money, the writer has used the word 'scavenge' which is a hyperbole to the word find/search. The word 'scavenge' connotes dirt, despair, desperate and that your life literally depends on it! People that 'scavenge a living' means their life is hanging on by one little thread.
ReplyDeleteThe writer also uses the phrase 'across the towering nightmare' which is another example of hyperbole. The author includes this phrase in their article because it is much more interesting to put 'across the towering nightmare', then 'through a pile of garbage!' (You can see why he chose the first one now, can't you?)
This sort of language makes the reader feel sorry for, and sympathetic to Marie and the 70 other families like her, therefore getting you to donate.
Using the quote " she learned to live with cut feet from the broken glass" makes the reader feel sorry for Marie so they give money to the charity. The quote makes the reader think ,that it is a horrifying situation to live in. My next quote is "there is no running water" the short sentence makes the reader think and it gives the reader chance to take it in. The reader feels like it is their fault that Marie has no water but they do, Marie should have water because they do.
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ReplyDeleteThe last one was by Shreya
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The last one was by Shreya
The writer is trying to persuade the reader to donate some money. The writer does this by making the reader feel sympathetic. Also the text has some hyperbole, an example to show this would be "the rubbish piled up into mountains" The text includes pictures and the children and her family have been mentioned which makes us feel even more sorry for Marie
ReplyDeleteAmrreta Pradeep 7b
when the writer says there is a danger of being crushed and injured- especially for the children it makes us feel that the children shouldn't be living this way and that we should donate twice as much money. the second one is when he says she longs to go to school it makes us feel that she has a right to education and it makes us feel sorry for her because we have that opportunity and they don't and also when he put the picture of marie and the housing project, he might as well be saying look at this girl and how happy she feels about the housing projects, feel sorry for her and donate.
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when the writer says there is a danger of being crushed and injured for parents that instinctively makes them think of their children and imagine going about to find their child injured or even dead. As a result to this they can Imagine what it must feel like and donate as as possible out of sympathy.
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ReplyDeleteThe writer actually tells us about Marie's life and how it is actually affecting people like her. Because we know this is actually affecting someone people are more likely to care about it especially parents as would not like there child to live like that. Now we know these things are actually happening to people, ( like Marie ) a lot more people will take action to these tragic situations.
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